Joe and I decided to take the long trip we‘d always wanted across the
country. We were like young kids buying our camper and stocking it with all the
necessities of life. Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie. We started out in early
spring from Minneapolis and headed west across the northern part of the country.
We both enjoyed those people we met at the trailer park. Joe received a watch at
his retirement dinner. To our surprise, we found that we liked the warm southern
regions very much, and so we decided to stay here in New Mexico.
本段的主题句是段首句，controlling idea(中心思想)是take the long trip across the
country。文中出现两个irrelevant sentences，一个是Bella bakes the best rhubarb
pie，这一段是讲的是Joe and I ，中间出现一个Bella是不合适的。还有，Joe received a watch at his retirement
My name is Roseanna, and I like to keep physically fit. I used to weigh two
hundred pounds, but I joined the YMCA for an exercise class and diet program. In
one year I lost eighty pounds. I feel much better and never want to have that
much weight on my five-feet frame again. I bought two new suitcases last week.
Everyday I practice jogging three miles, swimming fifteen laps, lifting
twenty-pound weights and playing tennis for one hour. My mother was a premature
本段的controlling idea 是like to deep physically fit，但段中有两个irrelevant
sentences，一个是I bought two new suitcases last week，另一个是My mother was a premature
Physical work can be a useful form of therapy for a mind in turmoil. Work
concentrates your thoughts on a concrete task. Besides, it is more useful to
workyou produce something rather than more anxiety or depression.
本段的主题句是段首句。本段的两个推展句均不能回答主题句中提出的问题。什么是 “a mind in turmoil”(心境不平静)Physical
It is not always true that a good picture is worth a thousand words. Often
writing is much clearer than a picture. It is sometimes difficult to figure out
what a picture means, but a careful writer can almost always explain it.
It is not always true that a picture is worth a thousand words. Sometimes,
pictures are pretty useless things. If you can‘t swim and fall in the river and
start gulping water, will you be better off to hold up a picture of yourself
drowning, or start screaming “Help”?
We had a number of close calls that day. When we rose, it was obviously late
and we had to hurry so as not to miss breakfast; we knew the dining room staff
was strict about closing at nine o‘clock. Then, when we had been driving in the
desert for nearly two hours – it must have been close to noonthe heat nearly hid
us in; the radiator boiled over and we had to use most of our drinking water to
cool it down. By the time we reached the mountain, it was four o‘clock and we
were exhausted. Here, judgement ran out of us and we started the tough climb to
the summit, not realizing that darkness came suddenly in the desert. Sure
enough, by six we were struggling and Andrew very nearly went down a steep
cliff, dragging Mohammed and me along with him. By nine, when the wind howled
across the flat ledge of the summit, we knew as we shivered together for warmth
that it had not been our lucky day.
本段从 “rose”(起床)写起，然后是吃早餐(“not to miss breakfast”, “closing at nine
o‘clock”)，然后是 “close to noon”，一直写到这一天结束(“By nine”)。
B. 按位置远近排列(spatial arrangement)。例如：
From a distance, it looked like a skinny tube, but as we got closer, we could
see it flesh out before our eyes. It was tubular, all right, but fatter than we
could see from far away. Furthermore, we were also astonished to notice that the
building was really in two parts: a pagoda sitting on top of a tubular one-story
structure. Standing ten feet away, we could marvel at how much of the pagoda was
made up of glass windows. Almost everything under the wonderful Chinese roof was
made of glass, unlike the tube that it was sitting on, which only had four.
Inside, the tube was gloomy, because of the lack of light. Then a steep, narrow
staircase took us up inside the pagoda and the light changed dramatically. All
those windows let in a flood of sunshine and we could see out for miles across
the flat land.
本段的写法是由远及近，从远处(“from a distance”)写起，然后”get closer”，再到(“ten feet away”)，最后是
“inside the pagoda”……当然，按位置远近来写不等于都是由远及近。根据需要，也可以由近及远，由表及里等等。